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    dots Submission Name: Never Will It Be About The Wordsdots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    Telling you "I love you."
    Never will it be about the words
    Showing me, with your smile
    Your touch is unbelievable
    I know how much you adore me

    Telling me "I love you."
    Never will it be about the words
    Everyday you make me laugh
    Your perfect structured plans
    Mind boggling jokes on demand
    My body trembles with your affection

    Undescribable feeling of worth
    Finding warmth within your giant hugs
    So much you mean to me

    So opposite we are...
    "Me and you."
    A wonderful pair we make
    You, quiet yet humurous
    Me, wild yet adventurous

    I may not know the ways of the world yet
    Which can be scary
    But dagnamit! Together we share endless opportunities

    For you to hold me every night
    For you to kiss my lips just right
    For you to catch me when I fall
    For you, make me feel indespensible
    For you , make me one lucky girl

    The words "I love you"
    They don't make me and you
    So much more I feel for you than that
    You are:
    My best friend
    My love
    My rock
    My foundation
    My relaxation
    My hero
    My strength
    ...and so much more

    I love you "Big Time."









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      Maybe only lovers ought to criticize love-poems made just for them! This is a lovely sincere explanation/outpouring, and so I felt quite privileged to be allowed to read it.

    When I read this out loud, it is an exhilarating, passionate chant, which goes through several variations of rhythm/emotion. That's what a successful poem can be like, I guess, and that is no doubt the explanation for the two radical changes to the verseform during the poem.

    A purely literary critic who doesn't recite, but who experiences verse mentally abstracted or concrete on the page, would go: "You need to be more disciplined about your verseform!" But my opinion is - don't be too impressed if you hear that, because you have a fine feeling for verse which results in an euphonious and communicative piece anyway.
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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