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    dots Submission Name: Systemdots

    Author: brighteyes18
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 421
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I am scared, so very scared

    And I am sad, so very sad

    I am cold, so very cold

    And I am sick, so very sick

    Then I think, and I discover

    What about this, or that, or those?

    And I close my eyes and I smile

    And I change and I morph

    I am carefree, so very carefree

    And I am giddy, so very giddy

    I am warm, so very warm

    And I am relieved, so very relieved

    Then I laugh, and I smile

    What am I? I am happy

    And I close my eyes and I smile

    I am changed, I am new

    I can fly, I can run

    And I can walk without the pain

    I can speak with my peers

    And I can laugh at some things

    Then I am euphoric and cannot contain

    My thoughts, my actions, and carefre spirit

    Then I'm rapturous and will not stay put

    My body is lighter than air

    I open my arms at this wonderful feeling

    And I praise the everything all around me

    And structure is gone, my thoughts are gone

    My worries and my stressors disappeared.

    I grow a bit drowsy, but don't want to lay

    My head on the pillow, for I dare not lose the feeling

    But fatigue has strong hands that grasp at my neck

    And I blunder to my lair where I rest

    But rest is delayed, and so I return

    I am scared, I am paranoid, I am sad

    But these feelings are smothered by the muffling pillow

    I am calm, I am serene, I am present

    But I am dissociated, so very gone

    And I am paranoid, so very anxious

    I am turmoiled, so very torn

    And I am gone, here no longer

    I wake up, well-rested, as physically as I may be

    But I am not here, I am there, and I have one need

    I need to feel that, or I need to leave

    And it all comes whirling back

    I am scared, so very scared

    And I am sad, so very sad

    I am cold, so very cold

    And I am sick, so very sick.

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