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Secret Love Songs


Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184 /213 /288
Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on December 2, 2009. Written for my Savior.


Secret Love Songs



Don't let go
hold my heart close
whisper Your sweet words
to comfort me.

I fight you
I push back at you
why can't I just
totally surrender?

Too stubborn
too hard headed
But my heart
sings love songs to you

Secret love songs
I can't find the words to

But I can't help
to sway to these love songs

And close my eyes
Envision You
The Beauty
The Truth

How beautiful You are
Your sweet face
never let me go
always hold me close.

Forgive my stupidity
My un-humility
My selfish pride

Only see that I love you
Help me to show
I want You to shine through
I want me to go

Engulf me in you
Never leave me
take my hand
and forever be with me.




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  We are all held in the palm of his hand. We are created in his own image, and to see how close he is to you, all you have to do is look in the mirror, and remove our human failings.

This is a very wistful and winsome write, and one that shows a very special soul and a caring heart.

Nice work, pretty lady!
| Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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