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    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 569
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1060



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    The Message

    The frigid temperature beneath my covers
    Stings me as I'm reminded of lovers....
    Those cold winter bodies meant nothing to me.
    It's your body I crave, your heat that I need.

    It's your searing warmth; that unyielding flame
    That burns in your core. Oh shame
    On me for being too aggressive!
    Was I to know that passion turns obsessive?

    I beg you my love, come back yo your slave.
    I promise to love, adore and behave.


    The Reply

    Your scare me love. Indeed you do!
    I can't be all that I am to you.
    Honestly! What have I done to deserve
    Unparalleled trust? A wanton bird
    That travels no further than her master's hand.
    And this adoration I cannot stand!

    Do I satisfy you? Do I "light your fire"?
    Well if I am flame, then bring my pyre.
    For I would rather die of scorching heat
    Than to be the body beneath your sheets.




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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a very intriguing poem and the beginning sounded very sincere. You have great understanding to actually write both sides. It feels like it has more of a reality background to it then what people always dream for. Not to say life doesn’t change. The reply in this poem is very significant, it shoes that you have the ability to view your self in someone’s shoes and also the sensitivity when you are viewing your self from someone else’s eyes. I enjoyed reading this and hope to read more.


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    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome. Is it true? If it is true then its sad but also very beautiful.
    | Posted on 2009-12-07 00:00:00 | by BleedingEyes | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazingly written. So very sad.
    | Posted on 2009-12-07 00:00:00 | by sugar_sweet | [ Reply to This ]


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