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    dots Submission Name: Undonedots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       This is the gospel message.


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    dotsUndonedots
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    At the dawn of all created things,
    the Way had made a garden paradise.
    In the midst of virgin innocence,
    a twisted snake had filled our heads with lies.
    Heartbeats pouring out
    were filled instead with doubt.
    And we lost the Way and all that we once knew.
    Without the Way inside of us
    itís just as if the Way would never do.

    At the center of all misery,
    the Truth took up our cause, then laid it by.
    In the midst of great injustices,
    the Truth was tried, and yet, condemned to die.
    And, once crucified,
    the Truth was laid aside.
    But the Truth, in love, could never let us go.
    Without the Truth inside of us
    itís just as if the Truth could not be so.

    On the brink of sure catastrophe,
    Life made an offer few could recognize.
    In the midst of all abandonment,
    this Life came down to tear off our disguise.
    And in our naked state,
    in shame, it was too late.
    Betrayed, we left Life hanging in our fall.
    Without this Life inside of us
    itís just as if we have no Life at all.

    At the end of every hope and fear
    lies darkness, which keeps fleeing from the Light.
    In the midst of all uncertainty,
    the Light revealed the Way to make things right.
    For the Truth still stands,
    as the Life demands.
    The Way, the Truth, the Life shine as the sun.
    Without the Light inside of us,
    however can our darkness be undone?

    Without the Light inside of us,
    however can our darkness be undone?




    Submitted on 2009-12-07 14:14:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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