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    dots Submission Name: Lifeline dots

    Author: col13x
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    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLifeline dots

    And behind the Neptune seas
    Did they hide inside the idiot winds

    To scrabble and scathe at doubt

    And ought but dare to save them
    Still they clung to the wreckage of drowning men
    As if the hope of sinking ships would spare them

    Have more of the storm if the storm you desire
    To clash upon the rocks they knew
    And beat upon the drowning sands

    Lest you wake in comfort
    Next your love
    And all your dreams awaken

    Do not come hence to your relinquished peace
    But capitulate ‘neath the idiot winds

    And cry oh loves within the seas
    Of all that you will make them

    Berate not upon old Neptune’s breast
    Lest he open his embrace
    And cast you adrift

    But look to the hour in which you were saved
    Yet turned aside
    The lifeline

    Coming the storm of centuries, echoes forth
    And still you held to slippery rocks
    Still you preferred the darkness there in
    And treading so, the deep water

    Still you cried, saying tears are all I am
    But not the love
    And so the love, you denied

    Have more of the storm if the storm you desire
    To clash upon the rocks they knew
    And beat upon the drowning sands

    To scrabble and scathe at doubt

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