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    dots Submission Name: Loving You Babydots
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    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 609
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    dotsLoving You Babydots
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    You are beautiful to me in more ways than you can see,
    You are always on my mind,
    it is obvious that you are the world to me.
    From your amazing smile, to the sparkle in your eye,
    I don't know how else to say it,
    you make me want to be a better guy.

    Everytime that I am with you, I fall deeper and deeper in love with you.

    Since the day I set eyes on you, your all that I have been thinking of,
    Just take my hand, and I will give you everlasting love.
    I do not know how to explain it, I feel I'm on cloud nine,
    A girl as wonderful as you, is so very hard to find.
    You mean a lot to me, and you are special in every way,
    You make me feel good inside, and you light up my day.

    There is nothing more than I would rather do,
    than taking the time, and spending it with you.
    You make me laugh, and you make me smile,

    On you God went the extra mile. :-)

    There is so many specials things about you that sets you apart,
    and when I laid eyes on you, you captured my heart.
    I have prayed to God to bring me someone like YOU,
    And once you came into my life, I knew that my wish had come true.
    I am in love with you, and you are always on my mind,
    I want to say I love you, and I want you forever by my side.

    I have dedicated this to you my beautiful Jessi...
    Oh how I love you so!!




    Submitted on 2009-12-07 16:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this piece is beautiful begining to end.
    im in tears, litterally!!
    im ashamed that i dont have much to say.
    but i WILL do this..... Fave
    | Posted on 2009-12-07 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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