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when my time shall cease

Author: Oracle
ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
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Words: 56
Class/Type: Prose /Depressed
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when my time shall cease

summer days have gone away, the things that past shall pass
what hope have i in summer rain, when the warmth will never last
in winters grip i stumble, must pain make me humble?
to give into that eternal bliss, to fervently seek that cold kiss... alas, alas... for i can accept this

Submitted on 2009-12-08 14:47:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This sounds soulful and lyrical, in a melancholy way. Winter has a way of chilling the bones and the heart at times... as does the pain that living can sometimes bring... but like winter, it soon passes and the sun shines and the birds (and our hearts) sing again. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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