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    dots Submission Name: This is not poetrydots

    Author: Outlaw
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsThis is not poetrydots

    Bashing RP on ES is like
    a rose's corolla unfurling
    to the point of day-tripping
    down its stem, dethroning
    thorns of their prickling

    It is a meme
            not mimesis
                a meme to do so
    [A least Dawkins would say so..]

    A gene transient in sub-cults
    [an exterior act of transeunt hat0ring, literally]
    self-proclaimed cultures, oppressed in mass
    by more pretentious self-procalamities;
    the devise of society is individual identity
    through impoverished, albeit secured liberty

    that being said
    I once read in a blog, or was it a vlog comment,
    that identity is sacrificed in sub-alienation (culture)
    a bit like society, but backwards, and that more so
    in losing face, one lost a sense of boundaries
    thus accessing boundless liberty - the devise (divide) of

    you see, historically, it has been proven
    that when an individual is brazenly asked
    to accomplish a task of mass glorification
    their answer is, as is the internet's maxim:
    I'd rather just bitch.

    Naturally, to any rational person, it becomes clear
    [look at how ES complains about its own state
    often in such reverence of its so exalted passť]
    it is not idiocy that is hunted among the youth,
    rather we Luddites of intellectual progression,
    it is the passing of our torch that we torch.

    run free, children of tomorrow, RP while we
    R[i]P with ourselves and our pretenses of intelligences

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      just to tell you..this piece reminds me of ginsberg....

    sure lots of ingredients kind of thrown together in the stew...but leave them together long enough..read it all long enough..the flavors start to blend..and in the end...

    it is a good rant...that has different components..but pretty good voice..

    i like this kind of Beat piece...

    better than some poems i read on here that are nice pieces of different poems put together..the effect is..some nice lines and no symmetry..

    but those are efforts, often made, to create the great poem...too much effort to tediously work a poem together...sometimes it is better just to let it rip...

    this rips..

    and is conjunctive to my poetic nature..

    dethroning thorns of their pride...yepper..
    let's pluck the flowers of their life...and press them lifeless between the pages of our book of rewrites of others' pieces..

    sorry, i rant here...you touched a nerve..

    i like this.
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      And you said this wasn't a poem. Then what is with the line breaks you damn swindler?

    The way you spawn new ideas from your words and pass them on seamlessly into the next thought sometimes makes my eyes roll back into my head with delight.

    And the content? Very provocative. I think I'll air it.
    | Posted on 2010-05-24 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a whole compendium of ideas for poems and carries the idea for at least one coherent series of poems, or for a long poem, and is fascinating and passionate, and probably expresses lots and lots of yourself, but one thing it is not: it's not a fine poem!

    If you will study it seriously, many a fine poem may come out of it.

    Many a fine poet must write first to themself alone..... so goes the saying we tell each other ... but for all that, I'm glad you posted this piece, because I learned some stuff from reading it, even though the reading was more study than entertainment.
    | Posted on 2009-12-22 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Teach me.
    Or would you rather just [censored]?
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by Urisen | [ Reply to This ]
      okie dokes. only thing i got for you (objective or w/e) is the first part the whole rose unfurling its corolla just doesn't work, or not for me. to me it takes away from the tone of the rest of the not a poetry. this reads like normal speak, this is the first time i've seen the word meme, but i've made that observation before, so your extendocabulary has come in handy for me. i hate loose mental strings.

    i agree with this, completely. i don't know how much it matters.

    it is not idiocy that is hunted among the youth,
    rather we Luddites of intellectual progression,
    it is the passing of our torch that we torch.

    i think it would be better to end on this. adding es related mumbo seems contradictive. i'd rather see there be no esness. but then again, maybe not. i don't know. it makes sense with what you're saying, and the last part i dig. the parenthesized part seems, and maybe i'm reading into things wrong but like immediate self contradiction.

    [look at how ES complains about its own state
    often in such reverence of its so exalted passť]

    i mean it almost sounds like a complaint itself, but i suppose that works. idk. i guess the es stuff works on ES, kinda gives an instant example drawing that tangency for the reader. yeah, i'd fav this if it weren't for the first part. no offense meant but i just don't like it, may be me. i'm not well read or w/e.
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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