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    dots Submission Name: Innocence is lostdots
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    Author: caelyn rose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Va
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 4/8/11
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 680
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 354



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    dotsInnocence is lostdots
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    Innocence seems to be lost
    A dying ember in a blackened pit
    Charred by left over wood that slowly decays
    A poor innocent branch it once had been
    Living breathing giving life to the world
    Green with rain sparkling from its leaves
    Then savagely cut down and split with axe
    Innocence seems to be lost




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