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    dots Submission Name: Summers Evedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 755



    Description:
       The title is funny, I dont know if anyone will get it...if so you might understand the piece itself for my more personal reasons for writing it. It has both spiritual and personal references and is essentially about gratitude or a celebration of love.


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    dotsSummers Evedots
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    Into the sun,
    I painted the lips of my God
    and kissed them
    with a very vivid projection of my imagination.

    Through my dreams, dreaming consciously I held close to me the mouth of divinity

    Like fire it warmed the tip of my tongue
    and smelled like sweet vanilla sugar

    Like silky milk it poured down the back of my throat
    and hit my stomache with a smile,
    tugging,
    gently,
    firmly
    at lower things.

    I lay before the sun,
    waiting.

    My patience is blessed
    Nature giving me the most highly regarded love
    and I,
    Live in paradise
    I,
    walk down the path of the most beautiful garden.




    Submitted on 2009-12-08 18:03:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      awesome!
    | Posted on 2010-03-20 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Summer being sometime after Autumn. Autumn being over and... eh.
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by Sir Jimeth | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason ths brings to mind a very personal and private moment between two people, and I don't know if that's what it is, but I can't get the idea of b.j.s out of my head.
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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