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    dots Submission Name: Damage Control?dots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsDamage Control?dots
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    I remember my first love and the pain thereafter,
    I remember my second hope of forever,
    And watched it slip too far away to recover.
    And again the third with not much left to give,
    So much fear and paranoia,
    And once again I watch it crumble before my eyes.
    So why is it this time Iím so fast to trust?
    So fast to make sacrifices, but still canít feel a thing?
    Why do I try to talk myself in and, again out-
    Of so many different things?
    Is this even real?
    How bad would it hurt if he left,
    When I canít feel anything at all?




    Submitted on 2009-12-09 00:39:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i've never had a boyfriend but your poem makes me feel cautious about having one.
    the way you wrote made it seem like you had really gone through what you were writing about.
    very heartfelt...
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by amihaz | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem pretty much covers all the waves of emotion that comes with relationships...I like the way you blocked the pain with numbness questioning if it was real or not.
    Very good poem!
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by JBN | [ Reply to This ]


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