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Taken


Author: Cayman
ASL Info:    31
Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182 /168 /72
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1091
Average Vote:    3.0000
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Taken


Blue skies above us
Dirt roads behind us

Lawyers tangle the unjust
While positivity is a must

Let negativity slide
Continue to show your pride

Angels sing harmonic hymns
Kinetic love is coming in

I hear you and feel you
I will forever try to heal you

Steal your heart forever
Like honeybees taking nectar

Love will make the start
And show us something better




Submitted on 2009-12-09 15:03:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem is nice, the last line is the only one that doesnt rhyme.
| Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by JBN | [ Reply to This ]


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