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    dots Submission Name: Takendots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 487
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 508



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    dotsTakendots
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    Blue skies above us
    Dirt roads behind us

    Lawyers tangle the unjust
    While positivity is a must

    Let negativity slide
    Continue to show your pride

    Angels sing harmonic hymns
    Kinetic love is coming in

    I hear you and feel you
    I will forever try to heal you

    Steal your heart forever
    Like honeybees taking nectar

    Love will make the start
    And show us something better




    Submitted on 2009-12-09 15:03:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is nice, the last line is the only one that doesnt rhyme.
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by JBN | [ Reply to This ]


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