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Without Running Shoes

Author: mojymo
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For Brandyn(Edited after first two comments)

Without Running Shoes

Have you ever run so fast
just because you could?
Just because you didn't want
to stop moving?
Your legs wanted to stretch,
your heart to lighten,
your mind to float away
because it doesn't take much thought
to run away
or towards something
or someone.

At the beginning,
I ran to you.
No matter where I was,
your face, with every expression
I could conjure,
piled in my mind,
caused it to crush all other thought.
And because I ran,
I made a vow:
"The day I stop running,
is the day I stop
loving you."

How sad.

In every relationship,
you hoped for eternity,
but I expected the end.
You were almost just another
test drive, a practice run.
I absorbed you
but became the tumor of our lust--
and grew.

And you stopped caring.
Or appeared to.

So when I ran,
my destination began to change,
and I ran, instead, toward
someone else.
And I do still,
expecting and
making a mistake.

End: 8:48 PM

Submitted on 2009-12-09 22:09:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey Mojy, i enjoyed the straightfowardness of this write, the way you expressed your emotion without twists or deep metaphors (kind of the way you love someone too?) and you just put it forward.

I have one bit tho:
and making a mistake."
I feel the comma is redundant here, or maybe the "and"? Anyways the ending just reads a bit akward to me, other than that i think the rest is awesome.
| Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
  Reminds me of that old saying..."We arent running from something...we are running TO something."

Nice matter what anyone tells you about it...dont change a nailed IT with this one.

Thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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