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    dots Submission Name: Loving Every Little Bitdots

    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       Yummy!! (Edited).

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    dotsLoving Every Little Bitdots

    Your saliva's like acid...
    or liquid shit.
    I can't tell these days.
    When you talk,
    the spittle slaps my eyes,
    soaks through the pupil,
    disintegrates my retina.

    My vision has begun to show signs
    of destruction.
    When I blink,
    blood coats the inner eyelids
    and streaks my complexion,
    leaving welts.

    The skin puffs, rises, bubbles
    with joyous popping.
    Bloats to capacity
    and finally explodes.
    Now you are smothered in my pain,
    bespeckled with sticky flesh
    and puss.

    I purge on this suffering,
    loving this mindfuck I've created.
    One massive pile of waste
    you consume and this brings us back
    to the present
    with your lips smothered in mouth-watering sewage,
    dripping down your chin and gullet,
    a satisfactory moan leaking from your innards...

    I take it back, consume myself,
    lick my shit from your lips
    and love the kiss.

    End: 11:45 PM

    Submitted on 2009-12-09 22:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha yes, this is what i am talking about. A putrid display of blackened affection laid to waste hehe. I enjoy the pustulence and sickening but feel you mentioned "s.hit" too many times, i feel you should alter it with "waste(s?)" or "fecal matter" or "slurry" hahaha ok no seriously slurry is just wrong! Anyways, lovely piece, just give me more descriptions of s.hit and its powerful and complete! :)
    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

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