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    dots Submission Name: Sailordots
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    Author: Semper Fidelis
    ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 135/185/60
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dots Sailordots
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    Braving the uncertainty of the seas has seemed to give me nothing but doubt-
    The currents of this new life are new to me
    and are becoming harder to read with each passing wave-

    I was once a sailor, of strong back and will
    and now I am without ship to tend or mission to fulfill-
    All of what once was drifts further off to the setting sun, ne'er to be seen again-
    and with the sunrise shows the red skies that I've come to know as danger-

    Without my sails, without my line, without my capstan and pilot-
    I must strive to find my course in this alien enviroment.
    I gaze to the stars, trying to adjust my heading-
    I do what I can with what I have yet my destination seems eluding.

    I am fighting as sailor and man to provide that which is neede for my famiy-
    But this world of land and steel seems to have aligned against me.

    With each new turn reveals a new blade with which this enemy plans to undo me-
    with each new day a new regret that I cannot be the sailor I used to be.

    Failure. Seven letters that imbue me with strength and vitality-
    For it is failing that I refuse to allow consume me.
    This new world, this new fight, this new way of life confuses me-
    But with tooth and nail, Fist and foot I'll fight until victory finally finds me.

    I am a sailor. This uncharted Vastness will never defeat me.




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