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    dots Submission Name: Desiredots

    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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    Tossing pebbles into the ocean
    Never meant to make these kind of waves
    They came and swept me in a current
    And they took me away
    Washed up on the side of an island
    I'm in an unfamiliar place
    With no one that can see me
    And hear what i say

    History has a way of repeating
    If you give it enough time
    Even without familiar faces
    There to remind
    I keep on drifting further
    Through the depths in my mind
    I wish i could leave my regrets
    In the past all behind

    I'm a simple man contemplating
    What it's going to take to succeed
    Cause the things that i wanted
    Were not what i need
    I learn more and more lessons
    But it's still confusing to me
    Maybe there's an answer
    That i just can't see

    And i feel like i'm drifting
    Through this thing i call life
    Wondering if i'll have a family
    And a beautiful wife
    With spirited children
    And a modest home
    All i want is this feeling
    A place to call my own

    Submitted on 2009-12-10 01:34:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what is your name? Where are you from because where ever you live whatever your name may be and the things your going through I can tell you one thing and that is you got some seriouse talent here you write so true so meaningfull on topics the majority of us can relate to and for me that is a big deal! I can feel the emotion spilling out of your posts and its huge to be able to connect to your readers in such a way you have with me I just am in "aw" you have posted yet another great peiece thanks again

    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
    Love the sentiment...
    and the writing is well done too.
    In time... all of this will come to you.
    Enjoyed the read.
    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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