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    dots Submission Name: Troubling Thoughtsdots

    Author: laffeytaffey
    ASL Info:    21/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 21/15/7
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 545
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    dotsTroubling Thoughtsdots

    No words
    No thoughts
    Can't stop feeling
    I'm reeling

    I thought this was real
    You and I
    Being with you
    Makes me feel alive

    Was I happier before
    Before you
    And holding hands

    So many empty promises
    And days that I don't hear from you
    This can't be true

    Maybe it was before
    But surely
    Not anymore
    I DESERVE more

    Looks like you still have a lot to learn
    About relationships
    About love
    And that thing called happiness

    It takes two to make this work
    Our duet cannot be
    Without there being
    You and me

    Submitted on 2009-12-11 18:00:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good job, i know what you mean, its hard to be invested so deeply in something and feel your other half doesn't care or isn't putting in the same amount of effort as you. it takes two to make a relationship work. keep up the good work, kathleen.
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]

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