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    dots Submission Name: take my pain awaydots

    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstake my pain awaydots

    I care so much

    They know so little

    Do they know the impact

    The feel

    The hurt

    The depression

    Hitting the moment

    I see their frown?

    I try to please

    Momentarily I


    But then again,

    Iím sitting there.

    There again,

    I see that face

    And all my





    Fades away quickly.

    Why do I care

    I wish I knew

    But the words

    They never come

    I canít spit out

    The truth

    The hurt

    The love I need.

    Wounded inside

    But plain to see

    The scars I make

    Are out in the open

    But in a disguise

    My heart is bared

    But they canít see my eyes.

    I need someone here for me

    Someone to love me

    And be afraid to hurt me

    Because the love I have now

    Keeps hurting my soul

    And it's killing me inside.

    Submitted on 2009-12-11 19:01:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this it was specific and generalized at the same time. I didn't like how drawn out it looks with the super short lines. I likes the lines(s)
    "My heart is bared

    But they canít see my eyes."
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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