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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 846
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1135



    Description:
       my best friend, my boyfriend, my girlfriend and to all that care bout me i guess.....


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    As we talk for hours,
    I understand your hurt,
    your hurt and pain.

    Pain that has stayed,
    Stayed with you,
    Even when you wanted too give up,
    It was still there.

    Now that you have told,
    Told me what was wrong,
    What you were feeling,
    What was happening.

    I did not think you lied,
    I knew that you trusted me,
    I thought you cared....

    So I told you,
    Told you what happen,
    what was wrong,
    How I cared about you, And
    How I was feeling.

    Then we were one,
    One soul,
    One heart,
    One mind,
    One body.

    Till I did something to kill us,
    Kill us and leave the lies,
    The lies left by our loved ones.

    So as we talked it over,
    We deside to go in the water,
    The water is where we met,
    So thats where we shall die.

    We walk hand in hand,
    Till we can't no more,
    Say our good-byes, and
    Look in each others eyes....








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      Amazing. <3
    I loved it.. Keep it up.
    I would love to read more from you. haha. :D
    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by xXRandomXx | [ Reply to This ]


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