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    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 339
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Sorry
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    Description:
       This is a song that i wrote a few weeks ago. Please let me know what you think.


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    It's 2AM and I'm alone again
    staring at the glass on the floor
    close the door
    and walk away again
    cause I can't take this no more
    cause there's so much more to this than you and me, and I hope that someday you will see

    That I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the words they cut too deep
    and these wound I will keep
    to remind me of the pain
    from when you went away
    and I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the timing it wasn't right
    and I was hoping that maybe tonight
    I'd say what I should've said
    back then

    The pain still lingers
    how'd you slip through my fingers
    I guess there's some things I'll never know
    but when you go
    I hope you remember
    the feelings I didn't show
    cause there's so much more to this than you and me, and I hope that someday you will see

    That I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the words they cut too deep
    and these wound I will keep
    to remind me of the pain
    from when you went away
    and I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the timing it wasn't right
    and I was hoping that maybe tonight
    I'd say what I should've said
    back then

    And it's been so long since we've even been friends, that I don't know if we'll be what we were again.
    But I hope that tonight with this apology, you could find it...you could find it in your heart to forgive me.

    Because I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the words they cut too deep
    and these wound I will keep
    to remind me of the pain
    from when you went away
    and I'm sorry I didn't say what I didn't say
    but the timing it wasn't right
    and I was hoping that maybe tonight
    I'd say what I should've said
    back then




    Submitted on 2009-12-12 13:55:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *claps* BRAVO! I loved the flow. The feelings being portrayed are clear. I too know what its like to be losing someone near. I feel that many will be able to relate and take something from this piece. Which is always a sure sign of a great writer! Again great job and Kudos!
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    | Posted on 2010-01-08 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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