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    dots Submission Name: To Refelect On Lovedots
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    Author: Blackphoenix14
    ASL Info:    17/male/AR
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/87/67
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsTo Refelect On Lovedots
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    The sun rises above the hillcrest,
    As does the joy of my heart
    Rays of warmth and love,
    From her I will never depart

    Fresh dew upon the grass,
    Young birds chirp in their nests
    I watch her gently sleep,
    My love to her I silently profess

    I enjoy the stillness and calm,
    Watching as she smiles and dreams
    She brings me to stillness and peace,
    Like that of a slow flowing stream

    My heart and soul flow with love,
    And I smile as I quietly reflect
    Iíve been handed a sweet princess,
    A sweet princess to love and to protect

    A vow to myself I make,
    As she quietly sleeps away
    To love and always cherish her,
    Until my last breath... until my last day




    Submitted on 2009-12-12 19:46:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was realllyyyyy good. (:
    I agree, i like the princess part to, but the entire poem is amazing.
    Great job!
    | Posted on 2009-12-18 00:00:00 | by dolphnlvr68 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this poem! so sweet and light hearted. I love the part about a sweet princess. terrific job. please keep on writing!!! :)
    | Posted on 2009-12-13 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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