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    dots Submission Name: Out of Time (Original)dots
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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 670
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    dotsOut of Time (Original)dots
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    (fast tempo)
    Look, right there!
    Can't you see it anywhere?
    Oh it's there!
    Around you everywhere!
    Who cannot see it?
    What is going on here?
    When will the puzzle fit?
    Where will the end come near?
    Why is this happening to you?
    Because you've run out of time!

    This cannot be, so you say,
    But I have a solution to your evil ways,
    You have to find a way to ammend,
    This is almost all I can give my friend.
    Now find your way to take control,
    There is only one way out of this.
    There is not room for another no,
    But never to enter an eternal bliss.
    Why is this happening to you?
    Because you've run out of time!

    (violin music fluttering quickly in the background)

    You cannot end it!
    Can't surrender!
    You cannot stop it!
    Can't suppress!
    Why you might ask, because you are outta time!

    Tick tock tick tock tick tock tick tock (etc.)

    (Trumpets and trombones blairing, violin stumming faster)

    You have no way to stop this,
    This you can't suppress,
    You are at an end,
    No longer can you defend.
    Can't let go of reality,
    It's not forgotten you!
    And on that I do agree,
    It should have you for what you do!
    Here, I'll tell you what has happened,

    (Silence)

    (whisper) You've run out of time!




    Submitted on 2009-12-12 19:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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