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    dots Submission Name: llulabyedots
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    Author: ricerox95
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 348
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    Hold me close, Hold me tight
    Everything will be okay, everything will be alright
    Look me in the eyes, and hear my cries
    You are the one thing I need

    Like a drug addicting and sweet
    Make my heart thump, make it beat
    Hear the music, dance along
    With you nothing will ever go wrong

    Give me tickles down my spine
    Everything will be just fine
    Feel my lips with yours
    And tell me you love me
    Then, Look me in the eyes with yours

    Tell me your fears
    Baby, no more tears
    I'll be here
    There's nothing to fear

    Honey, Honey, Catch me when I fall
    I want to feel your pain
    I'll be there through it all
    And make it through the hardest obstacles

    Lullaby, lullabye
    Baby, don't you cry
    Listen to our hearts beating in harmony
    Together and Forever

    Baby, baby
    Just kiss me under the stars
    Or even in the pouring rain
    Without you I would go insane

    But, Baby, remember..
    I'll be there, no more tears
    I'll be here, there's nothing to fear<i>




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