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    dots Submission Name: Let's just call them "Employees"dots
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    Author: Bleeding_AngelX
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 5/21/51
    Words: 782
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       You can call them CoreTech Employees. That is what they call themselves, after all. Others within the company refer to them as Team Adin. They are in direct employ of Mr. Adin and are at the disposal of anyone in the tourney that wishes to include them in any entries.


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    dotsLet's just call them "Employees"dots
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    Name: Rae
    Age: 27
    Height: 5'8"
    Weight: 138lbs
    Occupation: CoreTech Employee
    Likes: Money, Business deals
    Dislikes: Disloyalty, Filth
    Hobbies: She doesn't have hobbies outside of work
    Physical Description: Rae seems like the type of woman that might have been pretty at some point, but stopped caring. Her platinum blond hair is short and in a boyish cut, more for practicality than appearance. Beneath her lightly tanned skin are well-toned muscles from years of hard work. That very skin has several rather hefty scars marring it in a number of places, though all of them seem very old.
    Attire: Once more, function over fashion rules Rae's appearance. Most often she can be found wearing a black half-tank top and baggy cargo pants. She also usually wraps her hands in bandages to prevent them from getting too dirty.
    Personality: Rae can come off as cold simply because she cares more about business than anything else.
    Abilities/Skills: Rae is an accomplished fighter with training in a wide variety of martial arts, most of which are in the school of striking. She also has a distaste for conventional weapons and instead prefers to used improvised ones.
    Goal: To further her career



    Name: Faye
    Age: 19
    Height: 5'2"
    Weight: 120lbs
    Occupation: CoreTech Employee
    Likes: Butterflies, Moths, Rain
    Dislikes: Spiders, Thunder
    Hobbies: N/A
    Physical Description: Faye has blond hair that's been grown out to reach his lower back. To keep it managed, he has it in one large braid at all times. A young boy, his appearance is somewhat androgynous. Though he does look like a boy, he has strikingly feminine features and looks far too young for his age.
    Attire: A red tank top, a brown skirt, black shorts, and shin high boots
    Personality: Faye is usually quite, but still a rather playful boy. He doesn't act his age because he was never given a true childhood.
    Abilities/Skills: Faye always sees several seconds ahead of what everyone else sees. Effectively, he is always seeing slightly into the future.
    Goal: To make Mr. Adin, Rae, and his sister proud.



    Name: Farron
    Age: 19
    Height: 5'2"
    Weight: 108lbs
    Occupation: CoreTech Employee
    Likes: Guns, Money
    Dislikes: Anything girly
    Hobbies: N/A
    Physical Description: Farron has blond hair that's been grown out to reach her lower back. To keep it managed, she has it in one large braid at all times. Despite being a young woman, she has the appearance of a little girl, something she knows how to use.
    Attire: A red tank top, a brown skirt, black shorts, and shin high boots
    Personality: Farron only cares about the mission she's on. When she's been given orders, everything else stops mattering.
    Abilities/Skills: Farron always sees several seconds ahead of what everyone else sees. Effectively, she is always seeing slightly into the future.
    Goal: To make Mr. Adin proud.



    Name: Riley
    Age: 23
    Height: 5'9"
    Weight: 141lbs
    Occupation: CoreTech Employee
    Likes: Computers, Science, The occult
    Dislikes: Those who tell her she can't
    Hobbies: Working with computers and other machinery and taking things apart.
    Physical Description: Riley is an attractive woman with shoulder length brown hair, crisp green eyes, and soft lips. Her skin is well tanned from time spent outside and her muscles show slight definition.
    Attire: Riley is the most conspicuously dressed of the group. She wears an open button down, gray short sleeve shirt with a white hood attached. Underneath she wears only a white sports bra. Matching gray pants and gray leather gloves finish off her outfit as well as a number of strange mechanical trinkets and tools dangling from her person.
    Personality: Riley is usually very cocky, but still quite out-going. She's far less serious than most of the others she works with and likes to enjoy the little things about her work.
    Abilities/Skills: Riley has a magikal command over most technology and electricity
    Goal: To get her name out there and make a living for herself.



    Name: Nightshade
    Age: 22
    Height: 5'8"
    Weight: 146lbs
    Occupation: CoreTech Employee
    Likes: Plants, Flowers, Dirt, Outdoors
    Dislikes: Industrial areas
    Hobbies: Gardening
    Physical Description: With little concern for "blending in", Nightshade has unnatural, vibrant blue hair tipped in snow white. At least his crystal blues eyes match. Apart from that, he's fairly average in appearance save the tattoo of a tribal looking plant on his cheek.
    Attire: Jeans, a black hoodie with red fur lining both the hood as well as providing something a lapel, and a green t-shirt with a large letter 'A' emblazoned on the front.
    Personality: Nightshade is twisted and sadistic, bearing a deep loathing towards humans.
    Abilities/Skills: The communication and manipulation of plants.
    Goal: Unknown




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      Faye and Farron are twins. Sorry if that wasn't clear enough. As for the male vs. female roles, originally, the roles of the engineer and the murder, Riley and Nightshade respectively, were filled by a male and a female instead of a female and a male. The male engineer was far more of the more acceptable roles for men. He was a gifted mechanic and a good person to boot. The murder was a female that fell in love with the mechanic, but was killed on one of her missions and forced the mechanic to leave the group out of anger and sorrow. The two that are detailed here are essentially replacements.
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by Bleeding_AngelX | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, the characters all seem rather unique except for farron and faye,
    Attire: A red tank top, a brown skirt, black
    shorts, and shin high boots.
    So do they both dress the same and see into the future then or is this a typo? Are they both 19? Maybe making them more unique would be cool or maybe you gave them similar features for a twist? Anyways i cant wait to see what is in store.
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      for one, i am not familiar with your narrative lore, and just stumbled upon this, so i have to give u the shadow of a doubt--i don't know what these characters are a part of and whether they are the first, last or only a small party in a million.
    i think it's very interesting what you've done with gender roles here. you have three women who are all very far from traditional female roles in their own ways. you've clearly put thought into doing so. on the other hand, the only clearly male figure is subjugate to other females and is androgynous. the last seems to be simply perverse and not human--or is that the only available position for a non-androgynous male?
    given no context, i really can't say where you're gonna take this and whether it would be effective or not. i just thought i'd comment on what i noticed there...
    | Posted on 2009-12-13 00:00:00 | by beninbrasil | [ Reply to This ]


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