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    dots Submission Name: One Chancedots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 453
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    Description:
       This was written for my aunts breast cancer services.


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    dotsOne Chancedots
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    We only have one chance in life
    In life to complete what we were sent here for
    To see how far we can go
    to reach for that shinning star

    We need to take care of ourselves
    For itís what drives us to where we need to go
    And the strength we have inside
    Can shine for everyone to know

    But if we neglect our health
    How can we reach that shining star
    How can we raise our children
    And show them they can go far

    Show them that life was made for them
    And in you they will see a glance
    Of how amazing you are
    Isnít this worth one chance?




    Submitted on 2009-12-14 01:34:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think in response to this poem yeah though i walk through the valley of the shadow i fear no evil for thou art with me,,,
    poetics here would be i lost my grandma to cancer...
    and hope
    and love good poem...
    | Posted on 2010-01-28 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      That's awesome!
    To help others you must first help yourself.
    I love that saying. Just don't help yourself too much I guess.
    | Posted on 2009-12-15 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]


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