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    dots Submission Name: You Weren’t There (Elite Skills Exclusive)dots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 471
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       My first NEW poem in 3 years on Elite Skills!


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    dotsYou Weren’t There (Elite Skills Exclusive)dots
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    Woken by the tear soaked pillow
    Where I almost drowned
    Thinking and dreaming about you
    Where my head can be found

    I sit on the side of my bed
    With my hands covering my face
    With a mind full of memories
    Of everything and everyplace

    Went to the bathroom
    And looked in the mirror
    And thought you were behind me
    Until the fog got clearer
    And I found
    You weren’t there…




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      wussup cordell? 1st in three years? wow... that's while. Well, your way of stating of how you awaken in this poem is gr8. i like short an simplistic- this surely makes me want to read more from you. you have this lingering touch to the poem... idk how to explain it... that just keeps ringing thoughts for even my self-- like--- "what if, tho?" u know?
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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