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    dots Submission Name: My Wrong, Your Rightdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsMy Wrong, Your Rightdots
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    Sorry
    For the pain I put you through girl
    You really are my world

    Listen
    To what I am saying
    This time I am serious I’m not playing
    Sorry baby
    Listen to what I say
    I am apologizing
    In front of everyone today

    Apologizing
    Longing to be with you every possible day
    In every imaginative way

    Everyone
    Can see that I have changed
    You have showed me the light
    And without you I am no one
    Please make my wrong your right…




    Submitted on 2009-12-14 01:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It sounds good and looks thought out, but at the same time, it sounds like the same-ole BS any man spins to a woman he has wronged.
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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