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Blackened Hearts [Not done]

Author: girly101
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Blackened Hearts [Not done]

The Heartless swarm, am I their prey?
I search the skies, but gone is day

Darkness fell and captured their hearts
Now only left are blackened parts

Blood red eyes, stare into me
Restless souls, but still they see

What caused them to feel this way?
They are silent, with nothing to say

Only hatred to pour on me
And a will to put end to my destiny

Are they human, of this race?
Who are they, with a shadowed face?

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