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    dots Submission Name: Blackened Hearts [Not done]dots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       COMPLETELY NOT DONE
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    dotsBlackened Hearts [Not done]dots
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    The Heartless swarm, am I their prey?
    I search the skies, but gone is day

    Darkness fell and captured their hearts
    Now only left are blackened parts

    Blood red eyes, stare into me
    Restless souls, but still they see



    What caused them to feel this way?
    They are silent, with nothing to say

    Only hatred to pour on me
    And a will to put end to my destiny

    Are they human, of this race?
    Who are they, with a shadowed face?









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