Blackened Hearts [Not done]

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Blackened Hearts [Not done]

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The Heartless swarm, am I their prey? I search the skies, but gone is day Darkness fell and captured their hearts Now only left are blackened parts Blood red eyes, stare into me Restless souls, but still they see What caused them to feel this way? They are silent, with nothing to say Only hatred to pour on me And a will to put end to my destiny Are they human, of this race? Who are they, with a shadowed face?

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