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    dots Submission Name: the worst part of you?dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsthe worst part of you?dots
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    am I the worst part of you?
    the one you want to let go?
    The one who ruins your day?
    or you want to say no?

    I talk to you like an angel.
    then treat you like shit.
    am I the worst part of you?
    the side you want to forget?

    I hide my tears and smile.
    cus you love me like I love you.
    I am insecrue and risky.
    and you don't know what to do.

    am I the worst part of you?
    are you ashamed of me?
    tell me that you love me.
    or just let me be.






    Submitted on 2009-12-14 08:36:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Again, good effort at meter and rhyme scheme! This tells an age old story; the bantering between sweethearts; I love you; I love you not!
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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