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    dots Submission Name: when nothing is on tvdots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotswhen nothing is on tvdots
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    when nothing is on tv,
    we kiss and hold hands.
    you look in my eyes
    and you begin to understand.

    when nothing is on tv,
    we turn the volume on mute.
    you kiss my forehead
    and say "it's a good thing you're cute"

    when nothing is on tv,
    we watch it anyways.
    we laugh and whisper.
    about the thing we will say.

    when nothing is on tv,
    we stay together.
    we sit wrapped in eachother's arms.
    and dream of forever.




    Submitted on 2009-12-14 08:39:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a good thing you're cute...

    is there more to this? It sounds like this person only loves for the looks.

    Sorry, I guess I sort of took it as a good thing your cute, because I'd dump you if you weren't kind of thing.

    | Posted on 2009-12-15 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is delightful, and shows a lot of creative skill. I love the effort that you've made with meter, story, and rhyme.

    When nothing is on TV indeed! Sounds like that's when the real fun starts!!!

    Nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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