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    dots Submission Name: A Cry for the Moondots
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    Author: Peacejoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 30/29/23
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       So I was in a really bad mood one night and saw that the moon was not out on that night. Three or four days later I wrote this to relate my stress to the absence of the moon.


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    dotsA Cry for the Moondots
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    The moon has been shrouded by sullen skies,
    And the rays of the gleeful lose their appeal.
    The loss of such comfort brings always a rage
    As the calm of the beast is lost in recluse.
    The skin of a statue creeps slowly now
    Upon eyes and mouth to freeze my expression.
    And as the loss of my monster is found
    Then an infinite cry shall never be quelled
    Until the moonlight is shined abroad
    And those ravenous teeth have torn at freedom.
    Then my true flesh is revealed and distinguished
    As cries have been ceased, and life is released.




    Submitted on 2009-12-15 16:05:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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