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    dots Submission Name: Only in My Lifedots
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    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 657



    Description:
       What I am now and what I lost.
    Tell me what you think!


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    dotsOnly in My Lifedots
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    Swearing by momentary emotions
    Those promises must be kept.

    Throwing away distractions
    Though I was kept.

    Sparing me my mind and heart
    All that is needed to corrupt.

    Being completely enclosed in you
    Yet being so aware of them.

    Accounted for my slips
    If only we were spared
    Not left so alone.

    I

    Dragged decisions
    Hesitated to abide
    Shattered my only dream.

    A chance not taken
    A word not spoken
    If only you hadn't slipped away.

    A coward is what I am.




    Submitted on 2009-12-15 20:11:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it! Your word choice is exellent. I don't think what I got out of the poem is what you intended, though
    | Posted on 2010-01-11 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is ace. i digg it.
    | Posted on 2009-12-18 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      this is...what's that word? Insightful. It is rare when when i read something that i have no suggestions to offer the writer, this is one such peom. I really like your organization, the word choice, the sentence structure offers more clarity to what you are saying. Your point is abundantly clear, keep this the way it it. This is awesome.
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by WhiteTiger | [ Reply to This ]
      every time i read this, i think of what i am. what i lost. what i could be. what im not. what i desire most. i think this hits home with the feeling the resonates in this place. i feel as if i wasnt alone in this. i was talking to some1 yesterday about the most appalling thing is to willingly be in a state of unawareness. i dont know myself how i will get out of this fully & permanently. yes well enough about me. this poem is more literal than your usual metaphorical style. other than that man well it good.
    | Posted on 2009-12-15 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]


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