this is...what's that word? Insightful. It is rare when when i read something that i have no suggestions to offer the writer, this is one such peom. I really like your organization, the word choice, the sentence structure offers more clarity to what you are saying. Your point is abundantly clear, keep this the way it it. This is awesome.
every time i read this, i think of what i am. what i lost. what i could be. what im not. what i desire most. i think this hits home with the feeling the resonates in this place. i feel as if i wasnt alone in this. i was talking to some1 yesterday about the most appalling thing is to willingly be in a state of unawareness. i dont know myself how i will get out of this fully & permanently. yes well enough about me. this poem is more literal than your usual metaphorical style. other than that man well it good.