WARNING: I'm really tired and hungry, so I'm going to be tough on you. Um, sorry.
If you're willing to revise it I would be really interested to see what happens. It's a very interesting start and some phrases stick out, for example "infinite bricks," "always always," "arctic fire," and, of course, "acetylene blue."
Your capitalization seems a little weird at times, and I don't completely agree with your spacing--very much a preference thing, of course, but it seems somehow inconsistent.
First and foremost this gives an impression of an intensity and strong emotion, but I feel that there's a story behind the poem that might be even better material than the emotion itself. I think you should take the memory or experience this is based on and just write it down as clearly as you can. Then use that as a jumping-off point to express the emotion behind the action. Tell us the story; we're interested and we want to know that you trust us. Start specific and end cosmic.
Am I being confusing? I feel like I'm being confusing. Whatever.
Anyway I think you should revise this. It's a great start, a great inspiration, and I what to see what it ends up looking like. "Acetylene Blue" is a fantastic title and creates an immediate image in a reader's mind. You have some great material here; work with it.