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    dots Submission Name: 1dots

    Author: MidnightSun89
    ASL Info:    21/M/N.M
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 63/31/27
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       "I was born here and I'll die here against my will, I know it looks like I'm moving, but I'm standing still"- Bob Dylan

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    Walking the streets wrapped in dull milky light
    Sometimes I can see you, but no not once tonight
    Every touch of whipping wind brings a voice in cold disguise
    Hearing only the vaguest pains- of the end to a love that lies
    The slightest fall of all passing shadows are focused
    And I lay down inside on stone

    Close to the floor I feel a cold crawling breath
    I carry everything in memory- haunting me till death
    If I wanted some way out I would have wandered deep inside
    There’s no great pearl or gold in there, but it’s all I’ve got to hide
    The darkness gathers in the corners of the room
    With my eyes still open I know I’m still alone

    She wrote to me a letter, but the letter was never sent
    “Tomorrow you will find your way”-Tomorrow came and went
    “In time you’ll climb on over and find out what is true
    But when, or then- or until then- you’ll have to mortal through”
    This empty room becomes soundless
    And I bear my soul to sleep.

    Submitted on 2009-12-17 07:44:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know what I thought- when I read this?

    I thought it was a song- like James blunt had written it or something- it sounds completely perfect in that sense-

    I do admire what you say here, and how you're saying it-

    in all honesty you should write things like this more often- & don't say you can't cause evidently you can

    it sounds to me like, this could resemble a somewhat religious piece, relating to it in a way where your soul is lost, and you are perhaps in your darkest hour- and this girl she loves you but she can only help you so much- the rest has to come from within, and I get the impression in this that you're too weak to do it yet- so maybe the stone resembles something you're safe in- most would think a church, but i'm not sure.

    Anyway- just my take =]

    | Posted on 2009-12-20 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]

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