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    dots Submission Name: The Eternal Witnessdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Eternal Witnessdots
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    Empath to the logarithms of meticulous line
    And in the horticulture of stars
    Wrote the dexterous quills of love
    To their fractals own designs

    Seeded by a singular-everywhere
    Has infinite space cavorted in my blood
    With such finite detail
    As inward, imploding upon itself

    But still, it is a wistful sigh, which lingers on the forms of beauty
    And falls soft and naked in my arms
    Who but I can see this desire
    These pyramid angles, which press so gentle

    Holy line, sacred heart, it was formed
    And two must rejoin and repeat to one, and one, sing back, to one

    And as I sit beneath the old oak
    The air breathing veins of its wood
    Fill the branches of my lungs
    And breathe, breathe the momentum of perfection

    Scattered shadows and beams refract
    The dance on skin and bark
    The protégés of light pirouette
    Fondle and cuddle the immaculate

    Bright sheen, the sway of it pounding
    Slipstream through the flutter and twitter of birds
    Perched upon the final grasp
    I am nothing but the self I was created to be

    I see me

    Internal whirlwind, you are everything
    And a planet filled to bursting, for its want of freedom
    To be loosed
    And stand upon the vaulting edge
    And hear the cry with one voice said
    Forget
    And love
    Accept
    And love

    Love, keen to the moment
    Aching in its release
    Swam the giddy expanse of its own recognition
    And fell to its knees

    In the blinking of an eye, the eternal witness
    Views eternity
    And from that fractal mote, which was but a falling leaf
    In the constructions of its meticulous line








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      This reminds me of the creation of Adam in a way, the first man to walk Paradise, the first prototype who was given Love and expected to choose God over the woman made for him.

    A God who is supposedly made of Love cannot forgive a man who has made a wrong choice out of love, and damns him to hard labor and death for the error of his ways?

    The internal whirlwind reference stuck with me... I love that description of the inner turmoil.

    Great job!
    | Posted on 2009-12-20 00:00:00 | by stonewashblues | [ Reply to This ]


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