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    dots Submission Name: Shydots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 661
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 991



    Description:
       I saw this guy in the subway today, and he looked at me for a brief second. And in that brief second, I left like the shyness got the best of him. It left an impression with me somewhow....


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    dotsShydots
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    Is it me or
    Has the room temperature increased?
    Am I imagining this or
    Does it feel like everyone knows I exist?
    I wish theyíd have more manners,
    Look away man!
    Go wonder off somewhere east.
    Stop making me self-conscious.
    Iím not the focus; Iím not the feast!

    My head is bowed
    But thatís not from disgrace.
    I just donít have that courage
    To look at your straight face.
    Youíll spot something wrong
    With whom I am as a person
    And that somewhat I canít efface.
    Itís not your fault though;
    My confidence runs at a slow pace.

    All eyes on me now
    The awkwardness gets worst.
    My mind is filled with heat,
    I feel Iím going to burst.
    Iím ready to remove myself
    Jump for the exit, headfirst.
    You ask me why Iím like that
    Why havenít I caught that boost?
    Tell me why when our roles are reversed.




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