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    dots Submission Name: Woofdots
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    Author: 13thprotector
    ASL Info:    15/male/atlanta,tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 28/23/40
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 835
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    dotsWoofdots
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    Soft and fuzzy!
    so playful and neat
    a nice little puppy for me!
    this puppy
    is no ordinary puppy
    this puppy is a WOLF!
    a small playful wolf
    so loving and caring
    as it says
    "WOOF!"




    Submitted on 2009-12-18 12:07:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. I could visualize the wolf very well. I found the structure of the poem a little chaotic. You might consider changing it so that some lines are condensed and adding a little more puncuation. Overall, I think this is the start of a really nice poem though. It kinda reminds me of Shell Silverstein. :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-01 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]


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