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    dots Submission Name: Desires of The Heart & Minddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsDesires of The Heart & Minddots
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    Drained by these feelings
    Mislead by my heart
    wanting nothing more than to be with you
    yet longing to be secluded
    Left to fight for this life of mine
    "alone"
    Eahausted for my Mind desires differently from
    my Heart

    As time goes on and these days pass on,
    I am leaning more to these feelings of loneliness, and independence

    However these actions will kill you,
    these thoughts will murder your soul
    These are not my intentions

    I desire no pain to be brought upon you from myself or another

    So I shall sit here and ponder these thoughts
    for I am unable to do either...
    I am not truly there when with you
    I have detached myself...

    Unintentionally; Yes, nevertheless I am unable & unwilling to try for something else




    Submitted on 2009-12-19 07:09:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! I enjoyed this quiet a bit. I too have felt these feelings you convey in this peice. I love being able to relate to a poet.Keep it up!
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    | Posted on 2009-12-20 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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