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    dots Submission Name: Let's Take A Bathdots
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    Author: xAngeliquex
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 14/14/30
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 872
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1702



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    dotsLet's Take A Bathdots
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    I don't see it...
    The happiness I feel, where is it?
    My sadness is wrapping around my finger.
    Your love is so faded, am I to see it as well?
    I feel so drained and used, like a faucet you turn on and off as you please.
    You care about me and I still feel alone.
    THEY care about me, and I still feel alone.
    Cease your ramblings of love,
    I wish to hear none of it.
    I'll whisper into your ear something sweet...
    Mm, we'll be in for such a nice treat.


    You aren't getting anything from me.
    Not my love, not my body...
    That belongs to me.
    I am my own person,
    Hear me when I cry the loudest.
    When I scream, don't ignore it.
    When I yell, don't you dare think for a second you can control it.
    I'm still trying to see why I love you.
    And that's just it.
    I can't.
    I can't see it.
    Don't blame yourself, it's not worth the guilt trip.
    Stop dwelling on the past, I'm still here for you and love you.
    Screaming.
    I'm screaming inside, all the time..
    With the anger..
    The sadness..
    The utter lonelyness you and everyone else have thrust upon me.


    Swimming through a pool of thoughts, I'm writing with gritted teeth.
    All these love games,
    So small and untrue,
    It always leads me back to you.
    I'll kill you tonight,
    Sleep well my dear.
    Your parents aren't the only ones to fear.
    Shut the hell up, or feel my wrath.
    Now let's go take a bath. :)




    Submitted on 2009-12-19 15:39:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very well typed out. You have everything that explains what was going on.
    | Posted on 2010-03-06 00:00:00 | by InepticVirtozou | [ Reply to This ]
      IT's so awesome and Bi-polar-ish at the same time O~O" Kinda makes me have a new founded fear of you.
    Anyways! Great job IKOA!
    | Posted on 2009-12-22 00:00:00 | by CopperVeins | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice one! Bet he had it comin'!
    This is one of many poems that would compel a soul(meaning "EXCELLENT WORK!") I have read many before but this is one of my top best seen Love poems with a twisted ending!(please don't ask how many)
    | Posted on 2009-12-19 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]


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