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    dots Submission Name: To The Worlddots

    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 191/191/129
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTo The Worlddots

    Show me
    Show me what to believe
    because I know at this moment
    you're dying to set me free
    Go slowly, if you want to gather flies
    as for me, I prefer shooting by
    it's altogether too easy
    for a fire to freeze

    Show me,
    because I want to see
    just how easily you think I'll be deceived
    and I know
    where the gilted guilted go;
    it's needless to say
    that I swim
    across the flow
    it's a riptide, and I know what they said-
    don't go against it, don't go with it:
    at least this way I'm not dead

    so tell me, if you please
    what do you see when you taste the snow?
    Hear me

    Submitted on 2009-12-19 17:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude, you are an awesome f-ing writer! I mean, I like the majority of my poems, but you're the shiznet!!!

    | Posted on 2010-01-19 00:00:00 | by PhantomRose | [ Reply to This ]
      For every rejection line, three more pick up lines are born. For every mental disease made up by those ridiculous 'scientists' in California, three new drugs are created. For every one of those drugs, three more side effects. Too bad none of them warn about everyone and thier entire patriarchic armies of bad advice distributers. It would behoove you to ignore everyone for the rest of your life when it comes to a compromise of your individuality.

    They have nothing to show you. Believe me.

    Well written.

    | Posted on 2010-01-08 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this much. Everyone is always knowing how to FIX you... whether you know or not. And it takes longer to do than you expect to be alive. LOL, isn't it terrible that therapy isn't a quick screw-turn? When really, it can be... but the rest of the people won't be still for the turning.

    Fire freezes with inactivity. Too true. I like that reference, and the one of speeding by instead of gathering flies. That's been my motto, has worked for me (so far so good)... and crashes are inevitable. Why worry? Stomp that pedal.

    Yeah, I definitely like this one.
    | Posted on 2009-12-19 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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