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    dots Submission Name: suicidedots
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    Author: 13thprotector
    ASL Info:    15/male/atlanta,tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 28/23/40
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 654
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       In spired by the movie "The Dead Poet's Society"


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    dotssuicidedots
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    Why do you say what you say?
    Why do you feel this way?
    Can't you love me for who I am?
    Can't you see who I am?
    I love to act to feel the spotlight!
    But you sneer and smirk at my attempts.
    You fill my soul with hatred and woe,
    as I see nothing any more.
    Now you see how deep I feel,
    How angry and sad I feel,
    but now I see you crying,
    only because I could never be the son you wanted.




    Submitted on 2009-12-19 21:19:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm I like this I like the twist! the ending of it had me at first i couldn't see where you were going with this but mmm i do now and indeed a deff great post!

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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