Really good poem, the whole poem contains a long but a good anthropomorphism which is much more than the regular personifications, the short meter (rhythm) compensate the no rhyme. In “Love will dance, twirl” you made an anti-climax, its fine but I think it would be better if you change it in to a climax like that “Love will twirl, dance”. In “Playing tag with you trying to make you "it".” This expression is the best one in the whole poem; it’s a sweet soft metaphor, nice work.
This idea of love feels good and gave me pleasure reading of it. I like the duality of the work. At first, one sees it as relationship love. But then one sees that it could be about love of a child. Then again, one thinks it is about relationship love, but that this love is playful and attentive like that with a child.
I found this interesting, because (and this probably makes me a jerk) this is not at all what love is for me, and so it was very interesting to consider that it is different things for different people. And i suppose that's obvious, but i'd never really thought of it that way before.
I kind of liked the idea of saying 'love falls you over
now that's probably a pretty gay idea but i think it's kind of cool to let it do something its not supposed to do (as far as the twisting of syntax goes)
and it's a nice way of showing that it have free rein over us.