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    dots Submission Name: glidedots
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    Author: fryte
    ASL Info:    32/male/Pomona
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 321/357/91
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsglidedots
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    beauty is the mirage of a flesh so alive
    it is intangible
    a distant unattainable focus
    eschewed
    and i want to chew on its vulnerability
    i am mad with the disease
    of common flaws
    and i am asked, frequently,
    to participate in a world
    where no simple connections can be made
    what is there to say about a dream
    made up of leaves that expose no veins?
    in vanity
    i say
    dare i speculate upon a human frailty
    an error of my ways
    when i err on the wings of excess
    you ask me to paint a picture of
    fossils realized in reverse
    when all i can do is lead you to
    the still waters that cringe
    at the thought of fulfilling its duty
    to cast an accurate reflection
    beauty is all consuming
    with my soul clinging
    to its murky sails






    Submitted on 2009-12-22 03:11:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are fantastic. If I could speak with that kind of beauty. I know I am sp helpful in my critique, but I love every part of this. I love the message and you amazing writing and the way you deliver it to the reader. Superb.
    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by groovycay | [ Reply to This ]


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