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    dots Submission Name: City girlís pure heartdots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 425
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2602



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    dotsCity girlís pure heartdots
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    I want to, tell how I really feel
    You wonít have heard this, from a girl like me before
    But you know, Iím, no longer a child
    I want you to know, that everything you do
    Is dear to me

    Secretly I hide my words
    When will my true feelings show?
    All that I want you to see
    Is whatís in my heart



    Everytime I walk around
    Wondering when you will see
    All these clues Iím giving you
    Iím not that bad, really

    (Donít Stop!)
    Iím no longer a child anymore
    (Donít Stop!)
    But I know, but I know, what I want
    (Junjou!)
    and there is nothing that can stop me
    what can I do?

    (Donít stop!)
    If the world were to fall
    completely down around me
    I wouldnít really care, Iím falling for you

    I see you in my dreams
    The reason why I breath
    When I am out eating
    Itís you that Iím thinking

    When you think only you
    When you donít really care
    Everything that you do,
    Is dear to me

    Nervously I turn away
    I donít want you to see my eyes
    I wonder why I feel like this
    When youíre by my side

    (Donít stop!)
    The nights are growing long and cold
    (Donít stop!)
    But I know, but I know I really-
    (Junjou!)
    All I want is for you to look
    deep in my heart

    (Donít stop!)
    I donít think I can keep going on
    Through all this pain
    I long for you to say, please tell me now!

    I try to do my best
    You put me to the test
    When I am tiring
    Itís you that Iím thinking

    When we are far apart
    When not thinking of me
    Everything that you do,
    Is dear to me

    I see you in my dreams
    The reason why I breath
    When I am out eating
    Itís you that Iím thinking

    When you think only you
    When you donít really care
    Everything that you do,
    Is dear to me

    I try to do my best
    You put me to the test
    When I am tiring
    Itís you that Iím thinking

    When we are far apart
    When not thinking of me
    Everything that you do,
    Is dear to me

    I want you to see, whatís in my heart
    I want you to see, whatís in my heart
    I want you to see, whatís truly in my heart


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    **Junjou means Pure Heart




    Submitted on 2009-12-22 03:24:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can feel the raw honesty of this poem, and I really like the simplicity of it. some parts seem a little contrived though, especially the rhyme schemes in some verses, you might want to work on making them a little more natural. but kudos on one of the most original poems i've read here so far.
    | Posted on 2009-12-22 00:00:00 | by gotdalife06 | [ Reply to This ]


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