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    dots Submission Name: ~ ash ~dots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots~ ash ~dots
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    of course i miss you.

    i, the eternal fool
    the lonely watchman
    at my solitary post

    (waves must feel the same despair
    in their relentless pursuit of sand and shore)


    i want to capture your laugh
    and freeze each precious moment in amber

    but these memories would only render
    an eternity without you
    unbearable




    Submitted on 2009-12-22 12:37:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have to say, this is the second piece of work from you that I have read and I love it. You're truly talented.
    | Posted on 2010-01-04 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
      This very aptly, very poetically, describes the despair and pain of separation (an ache not so easy to describe). I absolutely loved

    "(waves must feel the same despair
    in their relentless pursuit of sand and shore)"

    I so wanted a stunning title for it;!?

    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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