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    dots Submission Name: Bless Them Alldots
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    Author: RisingSon
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    dotsBless Them Alldots
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    Blessed be the earth and trees
    rocks and stones, autumn tones,
    soil and sand, farmer's land

    blessed are the shining stars
    blowing rain, golden grains
    wind and snow, artic floes

    blessed were the silver furs
    morning dew, oceans blue
    thermal steams, crystal streams




    Submitted on 2009-12-22 14:12:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm...

    i wanna be a smart arse and say gesundheit...

    but i won't.

    yes, blessed be the could be/is/was.

    there is so much around that is miraculous. and sadly we beat it down on a daily basis. we should never forget the simple beauty/bounty before us. nor, not be thankful for it. or saddened when it goes.

    sheesh - when my ex and i first got our house, we had to have a tree cut down because it was too big and hung dangerously over it.

    the guy ended up cutting all of the trees on the property. and all the limbs and cut up trunks lay in the grass. i felt like an elephant must, when it touches his brother's bones.

    anyhoo... unspecified ramblings.
    | Posted on 2009-12-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      Very...Tantric. Kind of like those psalms (are they?) that you recite in church, like repeating that one line over and over again to respond to the Gospel of Luke or Peter or Harold.
    Yes, everything is beautiful. And then some. Not sure about the spiritual undertones here.
    Are you becoming a God-fearing man? Trying to get on his good side, aren't you?
    It's nice and tight, fully intended I hope. I wouldn't change anything, even though there's that nice abrupt ending, opening, and "altogetherness."
    Good. I like how you're refining your work, making more keen descriptions and less bull[censored] about the obstacles; it's all very much "less direct", with more intelligent abstractions.
    | Posted on 2009-12-23 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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