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    dots Submission Name: Darknessdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsDarknessdots
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    Take this all in stride for I have nothing else
    Take these events and look at the most positive outcome
    For if not what is left?
    Take my depression and throw it out the window for if I do not I will be tied down
    These feelings of lonesome and despair will have to be dealt with when time is to spare
    My lingering thoughts of suicide and death will need to subside for I have other issues at hand

    Darkness creeps its way in but I refuse to acknowledge its presence
    as the days becomes weeks and weeks become months this darkness only intensifies
    My ignorance can only last for so long...

    When I crack...
    When I break...
    These walls will shatter,
    As will I
    For without these walls I am nothing but prey to this darkness,
    to those whom long to hurt me,
    to see me hurt!

    These events are bound to aspire and when that day comes,
    I will give myself... to this darkness...
    My body limp
    No emotion
    Acceptance is the first step...
    letting go...
    feeling NO pain...

    Is the ultimate goal




    Submitted on 2009-12-23 06:38:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Darkness is a thing not many people see knowingly and those who do, and those who don't know usually seek it out for their problems they are facing.
    Yet for me I am in unimaginable pain Knowing of dark and light forces that stand at an unattainable reach. I see the word as a neutral force...
    That has no way of saying I'm not thinking positive.
    | Posted on 2009-12-28 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]
      I really appreciate how you can explain the way it all makes you feel and how it can completely swallow you and that you are trying to do the best to keep it at bay. I feel like that so much, but I am not as articulate. I seem to find comfort in rhymes and overused metaphores, and just the overwhelming despair of it all instead of trying to show that I'm fighting.

    Its great and I love how you presented it.
    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by groovycay | [ Reply to This ]


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