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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    trust, as fragile
    as twenty-six alphabets
    arranged, re-arranged and
    breathed into being.

    no, i will not wear unforgiveness like a diamond
    all glittery and hard.

    i will not swallow this bitter pill you spat out.

    and yet, try as i may
    i find that i cannot drink from the waters of Lethe.




    Submitted on 2009-12-24 03:43:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Brilliant piece of work.
    | Posted on 2010-01-04 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Ron (below) but I think you wrote better poetry two years ago. I guess that does not necessarily mean you were doing better two years ago, but hey, I'm only a reader!

    When we fall in love, it is just to get some sex. Chemicals are masquerading as commitments.
    I notice that you have been writing about this for 5 years, but also have an active religion.

    Another major project?
    | Posted on 2009-12-26 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this! It says it like it is, without ranting, and even includes some sage philosophy. Life seems to continuously deal deceits and hurts to all of us, and sometimes the struggle in living is to keep from becoming cynical and too hardened by it.

    This excellent write seems to brush aside a serious betyrayal and wound to one's trust, but not without remorse.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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