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    dots Submission Name: Saving my Fatherdots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 536
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 606



    Description:
       Mehhh...
    I wasn't really thinking when I wrote this
    This is for my ES Father.
    I miss you Daddy.


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    dotsSaving my Fatherdots
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    Oh Daddy,

    I love you, you know I do.
    I don't want you being lonely.
    I don't want you walking down that dark path.

    Not anymore. Father.
    You being alone in the darkness is not what I want anymore.

    I'll bring you into the light.
    If you don't want to leave, then I'll fall into the darkness with you.

    I don't want you lonely anymore.

    You haven't left my heart.
    And you never will.

    Father, Daddy....My Daddy.
    You won't be alone anymore.




    Submitted on 2009-12-26 23:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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